Mar Volume 1 Chapter 1 i've done something similar
this isn't your own work, i've read MAR, and all the chapters that are out of MAR Omega, the flash is very simple, and i like how you cut up the pages so that they're readable.
constructive critisism time! let the reader know that it's read right to left and also make it scrollable using the arrow keys, also maybe a little ambient music in the background too, but nothing distracting